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InAVoiceSoSoftItNeverWasHeard by ~agonyandecstasy:iconagonyandecstasy:





Daydreaming as I do, sinking, blushing in my bed alone
with phantom embraces and vaporous liaisons,
never at full grips with your absence but gladly in your desire;
I whisper "God" because I found her in you.

Unstable hours mount, dedicated to you;
so do I count our instances one by lonely one.
I spend these days on you and I alone
and purchase many nights in solitary.

I've spoken all my written words,
wrapped finely, tuned to our inevitable song.
And though a pallid star could be everything I am
I burn most insatiably, uncontrollably, when I am burning for you.

To catch the future in your eyes,
pensive fantasy must never realize
the tear blurred rays come from infant dreams,
of newborn plans and undeveloped things.
And I can only cradle thorns so sharp.
I can only give to you what, in giving, I do not
sever fragile threads that guide,
or pick apart the flower in which my love has now confide.

I'll curtail you as your wander-lust
pulls you ever from my side,
dodging my love as awkward rays
from a sun who's shine never shown physically nor visibly to you.

I am little but precious
like a warm wind whose voice
is strange in a sense
and deep as a well.

Daydreaming as I do, sinking, blushing in my bed alone
with phantom embraces and vaporous liaisons
and never at full grips with absence but gladly in your desire;
strange in a sense and deep as a well:
I whisper "God" because I found her in you.
©2004-2009 ~agonyandecstasy
:iconagonyandecstasy:

Author's Comments

I do have a romantic side. It actualy comprises about half of who I am; juxtaposed to my ugly, emotionaly rusted side.

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:iconcyantenchi:
I like the pic XD I'll read the poem later cus I has to get of the computer now T___T
:iconinsanellamagirl:
your words are wonderful, your poem made me feel light and tingly. i can in relate in some ways to this piece. i also like the metaphors/ analogies you use.
i dabble in writine, but nothing complicated like this piece.
do you like Poe?

by the way, you are gorgeous. the picture goes nicely with the piece-- but if i could suggest one thing, put a border on the image so it doesn't just look like a snapshot- it will make it more professional and refined.
... if thats what you are going for.
have a kickass day.

:abduction:

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despite all my rage i am still just a rat in a cage.
:iconagonyandecstasy:
Well...I guess the picture counts for something. =\
:iconagonyandecstasy:
I really enjoyed reading your comment. It feels so good when someone connects with a piece. Thank you.
Also I appreciate your suggestion. I just wonder what kind of border I would use??? I love borders but I often cannot seem to be very original with them.
Thanks a lot. =)
Love to ya.
:iconinsanellamagirl:
borders dont really have to be creative and original. The thing that it supposed to be creative and orignal should be held within it's frame. Black borders usually work well with pieces because they are plain and simple and add focus to what the border contains-- which is usually the point the artist is trying to get to. you can always play with the thickness of the border, thats cool. Just find a frame/border that is complementary to your piece. :beavis:

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despite all my rage i am still just a rat in a cage.
:iconkagomeresurrected:
" i whisper God because i found HER in you"
my God...that is a feminist's dream come true....!!!

"to catch the future in your eyes"....ahh thats beautiful. Similar to one of my FAVORITE quotes from Savage garden (its in my post text i believe) but your words mean more....you're TRYING to find the future.....very romantic....

i love the way you keep your word choice varied...most love poems/etc tend to say the same thing over and over again. "deep. heart. love." etc etc etc.....its nice, of course, and i'm not one that should criticize....but the more exhaustively repetitive something is, the less beautiful it seems, ne?

Ahhh..i love the versatility you show in your..."subject's" train of thought. One minute.....the person is thinking rationally, in a secure, adult manner....knowing that his appetite is "insatiable", admitting to his shortcomings...and in the next, he is almost....slightly childlike...."blushing"...."awkward".... lovely :-)

nice way to tie the ending....emphasis....

what a stunning piece....:-) this is one of the best things i've probably ever read on deviant art....
please keep it up....:-)

and of course :+fav:

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*KagomeResurrected :heart: @summaro :heart: *KagomeResurrected

sammich :faint:
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:iconagonyandecstasy:
Ahhh, YES! THANK YOU.
This is partly what I came to DA for. I need people to really spell it out when they like one of my pieces and you have really done that for me.
Someday I'm going to make music out of all this but I want everything to be so refined, so articulate and abstractly perfect. Thank you so very much for your words.
I am not adverse to criticism, to be sure. =)
Please do read my other poems/lyrics as well.

Could you explain to me this rating system??
:iconkagomeresurrected:
:-)
well...remember, when you work with music...everything will be just a bit easier...to refine...to articulate in the mannner that you want :-)
your words are powerful, and i think some powerful music would do them justice :nod:
I'm glad i made you happy in some way with my comment, i tend to prattle on when i like something :giggle:
i'd love to check out your other works, so i'll add you to my friends list to be notified of new things from you :D
As for the rating system....i have NO clue...that's one of those things i've always seen and have always ignored :confused:

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*KagomeResurrected :heart: @summaro :heart: *KagomeResurrected

sammich :faint:
:iconagonyandecstasy:
I just read up about the rating thing and it works kinda like this:
Regardless of whose thread (or post if you will) you are visiting; if someone says something completely off topic and stupid you can give that comment a low rating. When you do this and set your rating filter thing to a minimum (like for instance you set your filter to a minimum of 3 rating) then DA filters out all comments rated below 3.
But it doesn't work yet, they are still testing it out.

I imagine my music to be along the lines of the sweet and then angry music of the Smashing Pumpkins and other bands with their own kind of massive attack, trickles down to twinkling love kind of songs.

You are too cool. Hope to see you around!

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